7 April 2014

Tuesday's tales - Lemon



Welcome to Tuesday's Tales
This week I'm returning to my WIP Born Again. Amanda has returned to her bed & breakfast accommodation after rushing away from the fairground... 
 
 
The scent of lemon furniture polish assailed her the moment she opened the bedroom door, ousting recent events at the fair ground allowing loss and guilt to fill the vacuum.   How come she hadn’t noticed the scent when she was first shown into the room earlier in the day?
The night she’d learned of her origins. The night that weird happenings in her late grandfather’s room sent her scuttling back to her grandmother.
The night her life changed forever.
She pushed the door closed behind her, looked round the bed and breakfast accommodation and wondered whether she should cancel her second night’s booking and leave first thing in the morning.
What was she doing here anyway? It was just another destination in her self-imposed ‘time-out’ to try and find herself. But that would never happen while she aimlessly wandered from one end of the country to the other.
Running.
Where had that thought come from, and was it true? Was she running from her past, too afraid to face a future without the solid foundations she’d grown up with?
They hadn’t gone anywhere, had they?
Yes!  They had. However much she tried to hang onto the love lavished on her all her life, the lies, like a smoke screen, kept blurring the reality.
Shock kept her where she stood, her back to the door, the queen sized bed in front of her, and moonlight drifting in through the window to her left.
Was she running? She thought, if anything, she was working up the courage to start a search for her true family. But… There was that hateful three-letter word again. The one that knocked the props out from beneath all her good intentions.
Should she try?  Was it fair to the people to dredge up the past again? They probably moved on and not want to revisit the era of what surely must be their greatest pain.
But… The not knowing. If it was her, she knew the not knowing would eventually destroy her. If not physically…
On legs threatening to give way she staggered to the bed and dropped down.
A blast of music from the fair ground filtered through her window.
Something about the two men bothered her. If she stayed and tried to find out—what? What was is about them that stirred her psyche? Within all the metal confusion buzzing around in her brain, the one certainty that she’d never set eyes on either of them before remained steadfast. So why did they refuse to budge out of her head?
She looked at her travelling clock on the bedside table. Ten-thirty. Not dark, but dark enough for the moon to spread her light around the room.
The knock when it came didn’t surprise her.
 
 
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20 comments:

Sarah Cass said...

An air of mystery through this whole piece. You've left me really wanting more!

V.L. Locey said...

Oooo, great ending!

Lindsay said...

I love how you're building the tension right up to the end

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Sarah, I'm glad it works for you.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Vicki

SherryGLoag said...

I appreciate your kind words Lindsay :-)

Iris B said...

what a great use of the prompt ... and what a great ending.

Davee said...

wow, so now who's at the door? great ending...leaving us wanting more.

debi o'neille said...

Great way to close, leaving us hanging and wanting more!
Deb@ http://debioneille.blogspot.com

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Iris.

SherryGLoag said...

LOL Davee, I *think* I know but am not sure yet either!!!

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks for coming by Debi. I appreciate your kind words.

Jillian said...

very cool excerpt. Loving the story and the cliffhanging ending.

S.E said...

Lots of questions, I wonder what the answers are?

morgan said...

It amazes me how evocative lemon scented furniture polish is. Great job.

writerszenblog said...

Great scene, with lots of questions and intrigue. The suspenseful ending line is an excellent way to leave us. (Well, as a reader - not really. As a writer - yes)
Trisha Faye

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Jillian

SherryGLoag said...

Sorry I missed the next instalment. Why are edits always such a last-minute rush? :-) lol

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Morgan. I like the freshness of lemon polish ;-)

SherryGLoag said...

LOL Trisha, I'm sorry I missed this week. Hope to do more next time.