6 May 2014

Tuesday's Tales ~ Free



Welcome to Tuesday's Tales
 
This week's prompt word is free, and so I have picked a new scene in my wip Born Again.
 
It seemed to be a happy town. They had some kind of festivities going on in the park today that spilled over into the streets, with stalls, their gaily coloured awnings blowing in the breeze. Children ran up and down, carefree in the no-car zone street, which yesterday had been packed with vehicles. Adults strolled along some alone, others, couples holding hands. Behind the scenes Amanda assumed there’d be stress, but looking out of her bedroom window everything looked like one big celebration.
The weather, too, was offering support with the sun climbing in the sky, and pretty little white clouds floating past, some more speedily than others. Music, all jumbled up, blared from the fairground set up on the edge of the park, which was enjoying a busy trade. A group of three adults passed beneath her window and she watched them head for the park. Due to the number of friends who stopped their progress she didn’t think they’d make it anytime soon. It warmed her heart to see the man, taller than his grey-haired companions, sling a careless arm round the woman’s shoulders, while with the other, he cuffed the other man on the arm and they all laughed.
A pang of loss shot straight o her heart. This time last year she and her grandmother used to go everywhere together. Now she was on her own. The woman left a gaping hole in her heart and she still didn’t know what to do to fill it. She shrugged it away. No point feeling sorrow for herself on this gorgeous morning. Better, by far, to go out there and join the crowds.
It didn’t matter that she’d originally intended simply to stay the one night and move on, as she had since selling her grandmother’s house. Perhaps her friends were right and she’d made decisions to soon after the funeral, but Amanda needed to find herself. To discover her true self. So she’d cut ties with her past and been moving ever since.
 
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20 comments:

Nick Wilford said...

Nice job. You established this happy scene, and then I was taken by surprise by the heartache felt by your character. It was a good juxtaposition, and I'd like to find out more!

Karen Cino said...

I love reading about small town fairs. This was a sweet scene.

Heare2Watts said...

I remember that feeling of seeing everyone else around laughing and having a great time and inside you hurt so bad at the loss you are feeling that you want to scream. This emotion was very well expressed.

Lindsay said...

You really brought a sense of what it is like in the little village with the fair and people. Then her thinking about what she should do. Well done.

Jean Joachim said...

Nicely done. You've left me wanting more, but not hanging dangerously over a cliff. I love the way you painted the scene to be so joyful and yet she's worried. I'm looking forward to more of Amanda.

Iris Blobel said...

Lovely post, Sherry. Looking forward to more.

Jillian said...

Very nice. the beginning was happy and then pow, the emotional impact. I like it!

trishafaye said...

Great job showing us the activity and liveliness of a small local fair, with the community running into friends and having a good time. Then the contrast with her emotional turmoil.
I didn't want to stop, wanted to keep going.

morgan said...

I felt like I was there. It reminded me of the 4-H County fair.

S.E said...

I like how you set the scene and made the fair beleivable

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Nick, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Karen.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Heare2Watts I'm glad it came across so well for you.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Lindsay

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Jean, I'm pleased it's working for you.

SherryGLoag said...

Thanks Iris, :-)

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Jillian.

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Trisha

SherryGLoag said...

:-) Thanks Trisha

SherryGLoag said...

Oh, wow, Morgan, thank you :-) :-)